Hazera Report post Posted February 15, 2013 Mind Wonder. Lost Frozen peace Beautiful happiness crumbled Forgotten mind messed all jumbled Bitter anguish crawls in the heart And voice lost whisper Cries the ache away Lives a smile Million miles away Dreams fill the gaps While the tongue talks crap Secrets buried within No time to escape No time to love and let sun shine As sins blow the wind chime Furiously... Loneliness is sweet Once understood Mistaken Blinded adornments and greed Feelings fleeting beating Dying heart from cheating Can innocence be love? Or a mask to cover What is above And beyond... That is as the heart speaks... I close this chapter In hopes of tomorrow Maybe i'll be gone Tears of only sorrow Swallowed in fruitless thoughts A wish appears and i give up Save it preserve it for The next life... Lost Frozen peace... Then end. 3 Eternalbreeze, randomthrowaway and Sal_the_man reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hazera Report post Posted February 21, 2013 Dear Heart, You are a strange thing You make me Love You make me Hate You make me feel like the girl waiting by the gate You make me dream of false realities You make me hope across all boundaries You Let me feel, crushed, stepped, stamped on You yet encourage me to carry on You let me breathe in the scars as you stay trapped behind bars You make me wish You make me cry, question myself why oh why Oh heart i guess you are a friend of mine as you share with me life's blissful crimes Oh heart you are a strange thing Don't leave me too soon I confide in you, you may confide in me too. Love, The being you reside in. 2 randomthrowaway and Rua reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cubster Report post Posted February 21, 2013 Is this a freestyle thread or a poetry thread? You guys can make a general poetry thread where you post your stuphph if you want. I thought freestyle was verses between folk back and forth almost like a rap thing. Cos some of you are posting your own poetry but not in response to verses from someone else. Also, I would like see Noorie vs Writeous 1 Hazera reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted March 17, 2013 Friends. The look in his eyes when nobody was there When the bully, dared to abuse, him, the impaired A girl behind a computer, who cried out her eyes When random others called her a slut online The boy at lunch eating alone at a table The desire for someone to sit next to him, a fable Each one of us has a story, in a time of our lives One that we take something from, and pride Ourselves in their presence, their smile, their touch A friend is what they are, and their love never too much Disregarding the danger, and from haste they abstain They deliver and receive those massive blows of pain Through their physical presence, and words of support They ail us from the cyber – attacks that are purport Appearing from nowhere, sitting next to us with a smile They kindle small friendships into great big fires To limit our appreciation to one word, is a true understatement A lifetime experience simply can’t be mis-painted But as they are, being in their natural nature They’ll tell us you don’t need to do any favors So it is “friends” we call them, from all they are the best Peace be on them, whether they be alive or at rest. 1 randomthrowaway reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Yaya Report post Posted March 17, 2013 lines 1, 3, 5 are good. but lines 2, 4, 6, could b better 1 Sal_the_man reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted March 17, 2013 Word, thanks. Didn't spend too much time editing this one Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted March 18, 2013 We're having an event at our unviersity called "Sisters Week" which highlights the infanticide of girls in India & China as well as oppression faced by women around the world. This is a poem I wrote for the event...please feel free to share your criticism and positve comments *Edited* World’s Hope It requires two X chromosomes and not one of those Ys To determine the birth of a baby or its demise The fate of whether we would have to run for our lives Carrying this girl, rewarded with this burdensome prize Welcome to this world, advertised as hospitable and safe Where women in India are publically raped Where children are sold into the sex slavery trade To make money for family or being part of their clades 50 million reported missing, in one country alone Think about the others, to the govt. they are prone They have no chance in this world, better dead than alive Being told this, imagine how she’s feeling inside In the midst of all this, there is surprisingly some hope From the people in this room, to the ones saying nope (No) Individuals in this world, helping girls have their chance Anurada Koirala, helping the sex slaves to advance The woman is equal to the man in the religion of Islam There are women in this world, even unmentioned in the quran That provide a voice of hope that we are highlighting The women here in this institution, showing their strength by fighting There is no loss but only victory, that will result in the perseverance Of justice for those whom were not allowed the clearance Awareness is key, and one part of the battle The next part is movement, for which we shall saddle Because the truth is, there is a blessing in her little twirl And It is nothing but an honor to say “It’s a girl” 3 lilypad, Rua and randomthrowaway reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
randomthrowaway Report post Posted April 6, 2013 Sal these are incredible. MashaAllah, very deep and I can feel the amount of pure, sincere heart that went into these. Awesome. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted April 7, 2013 Thanks, I'm going to try and change it up though. Less rhyming, more free verse Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted April 18, 2013 Wrote this today. I haven't edited it at all A Fire A liter of despair fills my insides Unintentionally consumed, but forced down due to failure Time & time again, I am constantly drinking this poison Enduring this slow death of mine, I am However, I am not the only one facing this problem Scores of students, workers, adults, men, women, animals We all share this burden together And some will not make it out alive… But to those who will, there is something unique An entity inside of them, self-immolated Self-immolated by a fervor for a stroke of victory Success, accomplishment, all the words out there It is the drivetrain that moves them to their very goals Moving them to life itself, raw in reality Where dreams are nothing but possible And one person, through hell & its trials, can shine bright among a body of people And unconsciously inspire others to burn the same light So in fact the reality is, my consummation is intentional I can choose to chug this putrid product Or I can taste the sweet honey of a triumphant win The choice is not only mine, but yours as well So the question is, which glass do you want to drink? 1 Hazera reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted June 6, 2013 Wrote this one on the metro today: Here’s a Tutorial: I want to write a poem but what mood am I in? Should I write about politics or the boy struggling of sin? Words inceptioned in the mind, that are written to swell On the spaces of this paper, later to be heard, yelled Using similes, metaphors, and personifications of thought Each letter combo is a mystery critiqued powerful or not You can choose to make it short Or dedicate to make it a little longer And allocate advanced words to make it a little stronger Rhyming is about timing, and choosing the proper diction Pair the wrong sounding suffixes and your flow becomes but fiction However have no fear since there’s no standard to be taught or telled Because a Picasso of your mind is impossible to be selled 1 iLikeToast reacted to this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Yaya Report post Posted June 6, 2013 selled isn't a word Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted June 7, 2013 selled isn't a word Nor is telled, it was done on purpose Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Yaya Report post Posted June 8, 2013 sounds silly why not just use told and sold Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sal_the_man Report post Posted June 8, 2013 sounds silly why not just use told and sold because yolo brolo Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
